mY FIRST GO AT TRANSLATING THE SCRIPT

This was initially going to be my first page of the script for the opening lines, however I didn't like this layout at all and so have included it here purely to show my mistakes. I think the problem with this rendition is the fact that there's a bit too much going on with very little separation. There isn't much of a flow which makes it hard to read normally. Also, it all looks a bit too samey; theres nothing to break up the barrage of text. I would later work on this by adding subtle elements of imagery in there to compliment and emphasise certain words.